Budapest

A short story by Meg Sorick.

I tasted blood. I was on my knees, my eye was swelling shut but at least I was alone. Somehow –and the how was really fuzzy– I had managed to fight off my attacker. The block was quiet and dark except for the street lights at regular intervals. I had been in that dark space between two of them when I was struck from behind. Some preternatural sense had made me move at the last minute so that the blow didn’t find its mark, probably saving my life.

I pulled myself to my feet, abandoned my errand and hurried back to the apartment we’d rented for the month. “Let’s live abroad,” my husband had said. “We’ll never get this chance again,” he’d insisted. “You will love Budapest,” he’d promised. “I can work on my book and you can indulge yourself in history,” he’d tempted.

Julian had a way of convincing me that all his ideas were mine, too. So that when things didn’t go as planned I could share the blame. I kept looking over my shoulder as I ran, terrified that the attacker would return. I never should’ve gone out alone this late at night.

Julian had been tapping away at his keyboard all evening while I read quietly on the other end of the narrow sofa. Without looking up, he said, “Cara, I’m out of cigarettes. Get me some, would you?” It wasn’t really a request. The ‘would you’ was just a polite afterthought. He knew I would go. Most of the time it was just easier to acquiesce rather than bear his brooding if I refused his wishes. Tonight however, I had resisted.

“But Julian, it’s nearly midnight. Nothing will be open,” I reasoned.

“Try the Lado,” he suggested. “They’re open late.”

“You must be joking,” I laughed mirthlessly. “That’s seven blocks away.”

“But Cara,” he pouted. “I’m on a roll. The words are flowing effortlessly tonight. Please don’t make me beg you. You do care about me don’t you?”

Internally I rolled my eyes. I had fallen in love with the quintessential temperamental artist. Tall and gaunt, but roguishly handsome, a brilliant conversationalist, educated, cultured and absolutely the most frustrating and childish creature I’d ever known. He had enchanted me, romanced me, made me lose all sense and reason, and married me six weeks after we’d first met. Our days were certainly numbered. But tonight, I thought… tonight I would accede to his wishes once again and tomorrow I would make plans to leave.

I arrived at the door breathless, my heart thundering in my chest. Perhaps he would come to his senses when he saw my injuries. Surely he’d agree that Budapest was a mistake. With shaking hands, I inserted the key into the lock on the outer door of the apartment building. Tears of relief spilled over as I closed the door behind me and leaned back against it.

I climbed the three flights of stairs and stumbled, weeping, into the apartment. Julian stood and came over to me. I collapsed into his arms as he held them out to me. “There, there, Cara. There, there…”

“Julian,” I sobbed. “We have to get out of here. I can’t spend another night in this place.”

“Cara,” he said, holding my face between his hands. “We aren’t going anywhere.” He grasped me by the shoulders and spun me around. From the darkened bedroom a figure stepped forward. Julian shoved me toward him and snarled, “Now, be a good girl and let the man finish his work.”

Time Traveling

The Diary of a Writer – Meg Sorick

In the course of novel writing, there are points at which absolutely nothing of consequence is going on. That is life, is it not? When you reach one of those points in the overall plot, you do not need to record every little insignificant detail of your characters’ lives while time moves forward and the next major event occurs.

For example, in Breaking Bread, the investigation into the fire by the police, the fire department and the coroner all take some time to complete. Maya and Brad, their families and friends will be waiting around for the results of tests and the complication of clues, checks from insurance companies and so forth. I don’t need to report all of this minutiae as it happens. Instead I will scoot time ahead and as I do, summarize or infer all the things that have happened to our fictional friends along the way. You will see me doing this in the following excerpt. I have even summarized an event that I could have dragged out but chose not to for the sake of keeping to the main story. You will see what I mean.

The time traveling needs to transition smoothly, however, so the reader doesn’t feel like the story came to a screeching halt and then raced forward again. Thus, the bridging piece needs to be just the right length with the just the right amount of information included. I dithered over this next excerpt for that very reason. (Thus the delay.) I wrote and deleted, wrote and deleted scene after scene. Do I take Brad shopping for new clothes? Do I write about him figuring out where to live? Do I show Leo and Olivia moving into their new house so that Brad can have Leo’s apartment? What is Maya going to do for work? We need to know those things but they aren’t crucial to the plot. I left them out.

What about Maya having conversations with her parents and Michael to piece together what Tanya was up to? That is crucial to the plot but I decided they weren’t ready for it yet. My conclusion was to proceed ahead, adding in a detail as it needs to be explained. For example, a single sentence can let the reader know that Brad has moved into Leo’s apartment. We can assume he shopped for new clothes –he has no choice– but you don’t need to hear what he bought.

Other details can be revealed in passing or within conversation. For example, Maya and Brad can have a discussion/argument over him buying a new building and she tells him she’s going to ask for her old job back at the Philadelphia hotel. A lot of information gets revealed in a short amount of time.

And so… we time travel forward a couple of weeks to the funeral.

Header Image: The Time Machine film 1960 starring Rod Taylor and based on the story by HG Wells.